Seeking constructive feedback on protest poem?
This is a protest poem I began writing in 2019 about racism, bigotry, and corruption. I recently revised it since the murder George Floyd took place. I’ve learned a lot more recently about police corruption and brutality. I am seeking any constructive criticism or feedback. I want to know if I can improve this more. Thank you.
See the tumblr link below:
- LudwigLv 7hace 1 mes
I will be honest - not good. It doesn't have any feeling of maturity or thought to it, reminds me of the KONY2012 children's campaign. Or 'extinction rebellion'.
- Sir CausticLv 6hace 1 mes
Wow. That was really bad. I'm afraid it can't be improved. These things happen. Hope this helped!