Karla L preguntado en Sociedad y culturaIdiomas · hace 9 años

¿Esta bien este parrafo en ingles?

Estoy haciendo un ensayo argumentativo de la pena de muerte para mi clase de ingles, pero tngo varias dudas que quisiera lograran encontrar...

Este es el parrafo

Homicide may be considered a burden for been so heartless, and unconscious. Indeed, we know that killing people it’s a disgrace, and even more if it’s honorable and innocent people the one who get harmed. Nevertheless, with the right investigations from a real police organizing group, justice would work with facilities to incriminate the real offenders who do the attacks. A way to decrease negligent cases and to use death penalty only in the most shocking circumstances is to create conditions to incriminate someone, for then, assure if it’s right to take someone’s life. FOR EXAMPLE, IN THE CASE THAT HAPPENED IN ARIZONA, IN WHICH A VETERAN NAMED JARED LOUGHNER KILLED SIX PEOPLE, AND INJURED THE ARIZONA’S CONGRESSWOMAN GABRIELLE GIFFORDS, ACCORDING TO PREVIOUS CRIMINAL COMPLAINTS, THE ATTACK FOR MOST OF THE VICTIMS WAS ON THE “ENGAGED IN THE PERFORMANCE OF OFFICIAL DUTIES”. Subsequently, with the condition that they were in charge of their labors, there’re no uncertainties over the case; death penalty should take place.

No se, la idea que quiero dar es buena... pero no se si se entienda, Que dicen? Me podrian a ayudar a identificar cualquier tipo de error? GRACIAS

pd. donde tengo mas duda es en la oracion con letras mayusculas... MUCHAS GRACIAS!! =)

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  • JJ
    Lv 7
    hace 9 años
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    Homicide may be considered a burden for BEING so heartless and IRRESPONSIBLE. Indeed, we know that killing people IS a disgrace even more SO if it’s honorable and innocent people THAT get harmed. Nevertheless, with the right investigations from A TRUE police MONITORING group, justice would work with WAYS to incriminate the real offenders who do the attacks. A way to decrease negligent cases and to use THE death penalty only in the most shocking circumstances is to create conditions to incriminate someone, then ENSURE it’s right to take someone’s life. FOR EXAMPLE, IN THE CASE THAT HAPPENED IN ARIZONA IN WHICH A VETERAN NAMED JARED LOUGHNER KILLED SIX PEOPLE AND INJURED THE ARIZONA CONGRESSWOMAN GABRIELLE GIFFORDS, ACCORDING TO PREVIOUS CRIMINAL COMPLAINTS, THE ATTACK FOR MOST OF THE VICTIMS WAS ON THE “ENGAGED IN THE PERFORMANCE OF OFFICIAL DUTIES”. Subsequently, with the condition that they were RESPONSIBLE FOR THEIR ACTIONS, there ARE no uncertainties over the case: THEREFORE THE death penalty should BE ENFORCED.

    No entiendo lo siguiente, aunque soy inglés:THE ATTACK FOR MOST OF THE VICTIMS WAS ON THE “ENGAGED IN THE PERFORMANCE OF OFFICIAL DUTIES

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  • ?
    Lv 6
    hace 9 años

    Todo esta perfecto

    pero aqui: Indeed, we know that killing people it’s a disgrace

    cambia el it's a "is"

    y todo lo demas esta bueno. :D

    Fuente(s): hablo ingles
  • hace 9 años

    esta bn

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